Areas of improvement on Children's Film Opening. (Jessica)

After watching back over our children's film opening, the three main areas of improvement that stood out for me were music, mise en scene and the story line.

MUSIC 

The non-digetic music in our children's film was one continuous backing track, i don't think this idea worked very well as it didn't really fit with the actions taking place on screen. Also we created the track with the use of garage band and adding both quick and slow pace music with wide varieties of instruments, which when put together didn't blend correctly due to the pitch and volume of the various instruments. Although our digetic sound came across really effective, such as on the sound effects we used, the non-digetic sound was too loud and overpowering for this to have a strong impact. 

MISE EN SCENE

When we created our children's film opening, i don't think we looked into the mise en scene of the clips enough. Aspects of the mise en scene such as location, were not thought out thoroughly enough, for example we filmed "bagman's first attack" as him bursting through the car park doors the college refectory, this wasn't really explained in our clip, and could come across as misleading to the audience. 

We also could have furthered our use of props and costume, we didn't really experiment with our props, we could have brought the characters out more through the use of props and stronger costume styles, for example giving the villain and the hero a weapon of some kind to build the storyline of the of the characters.

STORY LINE

A third aspect for improvement was our storyline, i think from the first start of our idea researching we tried to create something that would only look good if we could get hold of professional surroundings. (which was pretty much impossible with our on site filming). We used a linear narrative but the story didn't develop in real time, we didn't make this clear enough to our audience either, which made our storyline weaker. 

We also, from class feedback, realised we had given away too much of the storyline in the opening of our children's film, it came across more like a trailer than an opening, this is an aspect we need to consider when doing our thriller openings. :)